Beaming a light on the torn Day-Glo dive fin Sea Devil had given him, Pierce located the words stamped into the sole:
“Property of Dr. A. F. Wright. 5½ M.”
But no New Mycenaean human could survive down this deep without a submersible or other high-tech equipment. Even he and his brothers and their fellow Earthling refugees required special gear.
What in sixteen hells was he looking for?
41 comments:
Sixteen hells? That's a lot of hell. Lovin' this story. The world is great.
Loved that last line!! I'm with Eleri. This story is wonderful and a MUST read for me! Happy Easter!
Oh, this adds to the mystery. Can't wait to read more. Great six!
I love the world building you have done with this. Its really so unique. What in sixteen hells? Earthling Refugees? Taryn, its brilliant.
Ohhh, that's really cool! I love the pic you have with it as well!
I continue to enjoy this world. Great six! Happy Easter.
very interesting snippet! Hope he finds her soon so they can finally meet :-)
Love what you've done with this story, Taryn! I can't wait to discover with him just what a special woman he's looking for.
Ooh, great mystery! Great setting!
Wow, that's a whole lot of hells. But a really great excerpt. I'm liking this Surfer Dude story a lot.
16 hells, earthling refugees, you've got me hooked! Want more!
"16 hells" is just an expression Pierce uses, folks. There won't be 16 hells in this book. His brother, Aidon, is Lord of the Underworld.
Oooooooooo interesting! love it!
xx
Angela S. Stone
http://angelasstone.livejournal.com/
I like the 16 hells, lol.
This is so intriguing! I love the world you've created! Great six!
I agree, excellent worldbuilding. Intriguing snippet! Makes me want to read on.
hmmm, he's looking for a partially clad woman with small feet.
16 Hells eh? hmmm - I'm just learning to say Y'all as have many southern friends lol
16 hells? I may or may not be using that expression in real life this week lol! Great scene setting!
You're doing a great job building this world while action is taking place. I know a few other writers who should examine your technique. Great stuff.
The details really amp the interest here, make the whole piece unique. Sixteen hells = teensy bit of excellent world building. Also, she's a wee thing, ain't she? Was looking forward to reading more of this, and you did not disappoint. Thank you for sharing.
This story is getting better and better each week
Surfer Dude. Love that name! :) The mystery builds...
Just when I thought I had a handle on your story, you've thrown me. Great twist.
Taryn, this is awesome. Way to leave someone wanting more and ready to buy.
Excellent job, thank you.
Best,
Allure Van Sanz
From your mouth to an editor's ears. Oh. Wait. I guess I have to finish it first!
This is such a unique story, Taryn! Great snippet!
Particularily love the diver in the bubble helmet illustration. Very intriguing snippet,Taryn. Thanks!
Christine London
www.christinelondon.com
"What in sixteen hells was he looking for?" - LOVE THIS LINE!!! Your snippets always make me happy!!
Oh! What indeed?
Oh, this sounds intriguing! Great six!
Intriguing worldbuilding!
I'm really curious where you're going with this story. I'll be back for more next week.
I am loving this story.
Unique, different and intriguing world building and premise. Love the pic, too! The deep is so mysterious.
Now I've described something as hotter than three hells--but 16? Yowsa! Wonderful undersea world in your six.
I'm loving this! The world you've created is outstanding
Sixteen hells? That is intriguing. I'm always in awe of writers who can create believable and new worlds. Well done!!
Love that last line, Taryn!
Now where's the rest to this post...I can't wait.
Love all the hints at the alien nature of this world and its inhabitants. :)
Sorry I'm just getting here. Too much work and not enough time. Great sentences. Really like his puzzlement.
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