Sunday, April 10, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 4/10/11

More from Mia and Surfer Dude's untitled story, the second in a series of futuristic WIPs set on the planet of New Mycenae, where Pierce and his two brothers lord it over everyone.

By way of explanation: Pierce is Surfer Dude, Lord of the Deep. His youngest brother is Zack,  also known as Cloud Boy, who holds sway over everything above the planet's crust. Their eldest brother is Aidon, The Reaper, Lord of the Underworld, hero of the Book of My Heart.

Last week we met Mia. Although Surfer Dude appears in the ms before Mia does, this is his first scene after she makes her midnight escape, leaving her dive fin behind.

Pierce scanned the dark water of Quadrant Five until his cramping muscles forced him to rest. He stopped swimming and floated within the transparent membrane of the Air Surround bubble, debating whether to surface or return to the compound to mute The Sirens' alarms. He’d already switched out and depleted three oxygenated bubbles without finding any sign of the intruder that had set the girls off tonight. 


Should he discuss the coral issue with his brothers? Water World didn't interest Cloud Boy, who wasn't doing much to curb the black market trade. But Aidon might help: nothing got by The Reaper. 



38 comments:

lexcade said...

This is such a cool idea! I love it :D

Misa said...

I love how you've folded the worldbuilding into these sentences. Nicely done!

Kerrianne Coombes said...

So cool xx really intriguing xx

Sarah Grimm said...

Aidon is hero of the book of your heart, huh? Hopefully you'll share some of his story, too.

Love the idea behind this one, and the way you wove his brothers in.

Jessica Subject said...

Wonderful six! You are able to portray so much in only a few sentences. I look forward to reading more of this story.

laynap said...

Love that last line! Can't wait to see more from this wip. :D

Liz said...

....suddenly I feel like take a swim - yummy pic -
Nice world building.

graylinfox said...

Nice world building, so much captured in so few sentences.

Gem Sivad said...

Yes, I agree with Misa. Your world building is very nicely done here. Great six!

KATHLEEN GRIEVE said...

LOVE the premise of this! Can't wait to find out more!

Patricia Preston said...

Terrific six. I'm not doing SSS this week but thought I'd stop by.

Stacey Kennedy said...

So much...in so few sentences! Woozers! I love this premise!

Rebecca Royce said...

WOW!! Those are awesome 6. It made me want to keep reading.

Sandra Sookoo said...

very nice! sounds like a good story!

Cate Masters said...

So cool. Love this unique world, and how you set ancient characters in a modern time.

Cara Bristol said...

Very creative. Great six.

Jayel Kaye said...

Nice way to work in a lot of info

desere_steenberg said...

Stunning post I need more !

Claire Robyns said...

Great world-building, was pulled straight in with those few sentences

Marie Dees said...

okay - read this after your tweet. Yeah, it is a bit of a backstory moment. But then, that could depend on what's around it storywise.

Joanne Stewart said...

Add me to the list. I love the idea of this, and these are very intriguing six! I want more! lol

jenniferprobst said...

Great entry, Taryn, really different and intriguing!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

The more I read from this, the more I want to read the whole story -- love the premise and world building; oxygen bubbles...too cooL! Fab six, Taryn.

Lindsay said...

I love how you worked the otherworlds into these lines.

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Surfers and dive fins... My husband would love this, as he's a surfer.

sassyspeaks said...

good snippet - black market ?

Hailey Edwards said...

Such a cool world you're building. Can't wait to hear more about it.

D L Jackson said...

Very interesting world. Dying to see more.
Thanks for sharing.

Susanna Fraser said...

Fascinating set-up and great world-building.

Lorien Velez said...

Love it! Great character and flow. Can't wait to read more about Surfer Dude and his brothers. :)

Eleri Stone said...

Such an interesting world. Can't wait to learn more about it.

JL Walters said...

How well I remember this story. Are you working on it again.

diannehartsock said...

'nothing gets by the Reaper'. Great line. He sounds the more serious of the three.

Laura Kaye said...

Whoa--interesting worldbuilding! The brothers sounds like great characters!

Taryn Kincaid said...

I dunno, Janet. I'm still all hung up at the point where they're at the ball for Aidon & Stef. 'Cause there may be no ball for Aidon & Stef. So I have to figure out what happens if this turns out to be Book 1. The backstory. How important Aidon is.

Also, I started something completely new and it's captivating me for the moment.

Pippa Jay said...

Gives some great images of the world you're building here. And loved that last line 'nothing got by The Reaper.'

Laurie A. Green said...

Oh, a futuristic! Love the total departure from your previous work. This sounds fun and very imaginative, with these few sentences already beginning to paint unique characters in an amazing world.

Lauri J Owen said...

Delicious pic - and great six.

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