Sunday, April 17, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 4/17/11

A little bit more from Surfer Dude...Lord of the Deep, who's still looking for the intruder that set off his Sirens.

Pierce swam with great care along the barrier reef, his methodical glide slowing as he searched for subtle clues,  displacing the colonies of amethyst polyps, glass sponges and coralline algae.

A glowing cryptopasara couesi attached itself to his side and bumped his ribs to get his attention.

 “What do you want, Sea Devil?” Pierce growled without looking up.

The anglerfish worked its wide jaws, as if barking at him, and deposited a neoprene prize in Pierce’s hand: a full-footed, hot-pink dive fin, cleanly slit along the side, the strap ragged as if something had taken a bite.

“Where’d you get it, pal?”

The fish skimmed the side of an intricate, broccoli-shaped formation, flicking its tail to center Pierce’s focus, then waggled its bioluminescent lure in salute, and fluttered away.








34 comments:

Kathleen Grieve said...

God! I'm really lovin' this story! :) Great description of the way he moves and interacts within his environment!

Jessica Subject said...

I love the description you've included in this excerpt! I'm very intrigued to keep reading more from this story.

Liz said...

A great descriptive piece of writing!

lexcade said...

I want an anglerfish now. Especially if it can solute me.

This just keeps getting cooler and cooler as we go! I love this concept. He really is Lord of the Deep.

graylinfox said...

I never thought I would get this pulled into an underwater environment, but your descriptions paint such a detailed picture that I'm there. I can't wait to read more from this story.

D L Jackson said...

I adore this world. I get the feeling she can run, but she can't hide.
Thanks for sharing.

Heather Thurmeier said...

I love this underwater world that you've created! Great snippet.

Cate Masters said...

Love this description - felt like I was there.

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, this sounds really, really cool. I very much want to read more.

Vivien Jackson said...

Can't even pinpoint what I like so much about this. Maybe because it's unique, enveloping, fascinating without being cluttered? Yeah, that. Looking forward to more.

Sarah Grimm said...

I love your descriptions of this world. Brings me right into it. Great job!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice job and great descriptions!

Marie Dees said...

The fish seem very helpful. fun six!

jennajaxon said...

Wonderful description! My hubby and I scuba dive, so I'm right there with the character, just lovin' it! Great six.

Jayel Kaye said...

The descriptions of his methodical movement and his awareness of everything around him is beautifully done.

Joanne Stewart said...

Very vivid descriptions. Great six!

Rebecca Royce said...

I love your writing so much

Gem Sivad said...

Oh so very nice. Beautiful!

Susanna Fraser said...

This is wonderful worldbuilding.

Lindsay said...

What a picture you're building.

Jessica K said...

How great to get help from an anglerfish! Very creative and intriguing.

Eleri Stone said...

The detail in your descriptions really bring this world to life. You have a hell of an imagination.

Liana Brooks said...

Nit-picking... what is an angler fish doing so near the surface? Is this his regular companion? A pet of some kind? Unless there's an explanation in text I'm going to have questions.

Otherwise, love it!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Just so you know...

They aren't near the surface.

Not even close!

Hailey Edwards said...

How very cool. Can't wait to see what you do with this story.

JL Walters said...

As usual, great description. Hope you stick with this.

Lindsay said...

I'm guessing that they are around several hundred meters below the surface.

ada-hoffmann said...

I love the visual world here - the reef and the message-taking anglerfish. Very well brought to life!

Ella Drake said...

Oh, this is so awesome. Great snippet

Stacey Kennedy said...

Taryn, I love your writing--you are just so talented! :D

Alanna Coca said...

Love the snippet. Pierce is a sexy name too. Good choice.

J.Rose Allister said...

How come I don't have an angel fish retrieving goodies from the deep for me? I want one! LOL. Descriptive, nice six.

Zenobia Renquist said...

Now this sounds fun. I need to read more about this swimming hero.

~ Renee

Taryn Kincaid said...

Zenobia Renquist! LOL!

(LOVE IT!)

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