Sunday, April 24, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 4/24/11

Since y'all seem to be enjoying Surfer Dude, Lord of the Deep...another six. Our story up to now: After his Sirens screech their alarms in Water World, Pierce searches the coral reef for the intruder that set them off. And, with the help of an anglerfish, finds the hot pink dive fin Mia left behind.


Beaming a light on the torn Day-Glo dive fin Sea Devil had given him, Pierce located the words stamped into the sole:

“Property of Dr. A. F. Wright. 5½ M.”

But no New Mycenaean human could survive down this deep without a submersible or other high-tech equipment. Even he and his brothers and their fellow Earthling refugees required special gear.

What in sixteen hells was he looking for?






41 comments:

Eleri Stone said...

Sixteen hells? That's a lot of hell. Lovin' this story. The world is great.

Kathleen Grieve said...

Loved that last line!! I'm with Eleri. This story is wonderful and a MUST read for me! Happy Easter!

Jessica Subject said...

Oh, this adds to the mystery. Can't wait to read more. Great six!

Rebecca Royce said...

I love the world building you have done with this. Its really so unique. What in sixteen hells? Earthling Refugees? Taryn, its brilliant.

Ann Mayburn said...

Ohhh, that's really cool! I love the pic you have with it as well!

Gem Sivad said...

I continue to enjoy this world. Great six! Happy Easter.

Sandra Sookoo said...

very interesting snippet! Hope he finds her soon so they can finally meet :-)

Sarah Grimm said...

Love what you've done with this story, Taryn! I can't wait to discover with him just what a special woman he's looking for.

Laura Kaye said...

Ooh, great mystery! Great setting!

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, that's a whole lot of hells. But a really great excerpt. I'm liking this Surfer Dude story a lot.

graylinfox said...

16 hells, earthling refugees, you've got me hooked! Want more!

Taryn Kincaid said...

"16 hells" is just an expression Pierce uses, folks. There won't be 16 hells in this book. His brother, Aidon, is Lord of the Underworld.

Anonymous said...

Oooooooooo interesting! love it!

xx
Angela S. Stone
http://angelasstone.livejournal.com/

Vegetarian Cannibal said...

I like the 16 hells, lol.

Chrystalla Thoma said...

This is so intriguing! I love the world you've created! Great six!

Cate Masters said...

I agree, excellent worldbuilding. Intriguing snippet! Makes me want to read on.

Marie Dees said...

hmmm, he's looking for a partially clad woman with small feet.

sue said...

16 Hells eh? hmmm - I'm just learning to say Y'all as have many southern friends lol

Luxie Ryder said...

16 hells? I may or may not be using that expression in real life this week lol! Great scene setting!

Jessica K said...

You're doing a great job building this world while action is taking place. I know a few other writers who should examine your technique. Great stuff.

Vivien Jackson said...

The details really amp the interest here, make the whole piece unique. Sixteen hells = teensy bit of excellent world building. Also, she's a wee thing, ain't she? Was looking forward to reading more of this, and you did not disappoint. Thank you for sharing.

Lindsay said...

This story is getting better and better each week

diannehartsock said...

Surfer Dude. Love that name! :) The mystery builds...

Hailey Edwards said...

Just when I thought I had a handle on your story, you've thrown me. Great twist.

AllureVanSanz said...

Taryn, this is awesome. Way to leave someone wanting more and ready to buy.

Excellent job, thank you.
Best,
Allure Van Sanz

Taryn Kincaid said...

From your mouth to an editor's ears. Oh. Wait. I guess I have to finish it first!

Joanne Stewart said...

This is such a unique story, Taryn! Great snippet!

Christine London said...

Particularily love the diver in the bubble helmet illustration. Very intriguing snippet,Taryn. Thanks!
Christine London
www.christinelondon.com

Stacey Kennedy said...

"What in sixteen hells was he looking for?" - LOVE THIS LINE!!! Your snippets always make me happy!!

Dee Carney said...

Oh! What indeed?

Gayle said...

Oh, this sounds intriguing! Great six!

Susanna Fraser said...

Intriguing worldbuilding!

Heather Thurmeier said...

I'm really curious where you're going with this story. I'll be back for more next week.

Jayel Kaye said...

I am loving this story.

Laurie A. Green said...

Unique, different and intriguing world building and premise. Love the pic, too! The deep is so mysterious.

jennajaxon said...

Now I've described something as hotter than three hells--but 16? Yowsa! Wonderful undersea world in your six.

Liia Ann White said...

I'm loving this! The world you've created is outstanding

Liz Fichera said...

Sixteen hells? That is intriguing. I'm always in awe of writers who can create believable and new worlds. Well done!!

laynap said...

Love that last line, Taryn!

Now where's the rest to this post...I can't wait.

Pippa Jay said...

Love all the hints at the alien nature of this world and its inhabitants. :)

JL Walters said...

Sorry I'm just getting here. Too much work and not enough time. Great sentences. Really like his puzzlement.

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