So here's Aidon, one of my favorite heroes ever, felled, flat on his ass, gazing up at Steph, awash in love juice and baffled and befuddled. (Well, maybe not totally.)
(Ten sentences smashed into six for Six Sentence Sunday. You can probably tell where they were soldered together. Or where overly creative punctuation was employed. Won't stay that way!)
Testosterone sloshes through me and passions of every stripe, formerly without power, inflame me. Emotions I’d thought long dead and buried erupt like a fireworks display and I’m ready to leap up, naked, wounded, unarmed but belligerent, screaming for satisfaction. War, sex. My id’s in masculine overdrive; my inner hound howls.
I need to have her.
Now.
34 comments:
I like a man that knows what he wants! Great excerpt Taryn.
Finally, I get to see a little snippet of the book you love! Great six!
Nice. And don't worry I don't count the sentences so you could have cheated and made it ten - lol
Thanks, Lisa (Yeah, he's definitely in the moment.)
Heather -- So far, I'm the only one who does, I think. Hoping a little slash and burn will change that!
Liz --Pretty sure you've heard way more than 10 by now!
Gotta love a man who knows what he wants and when :)
Great post Taryn!
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I LOVE reading a story in first person from a man's POV--just something so sexy about it! And with that snippet, I can only imagine I'd be left drooling!!
Damn! Love it!
Thanks, ladies! Loved yours, too.
Oh, I do love first person male perspective. I wish there was more of it. Very hot excerpt. :)
Aidon often has some interesting perspectives!
Wow, Taryn, that is powerful. It's rare I read first person male viewpoint - I just LOVE this piece.
Slash and burn. Are you crazy? That was great! and counting is WAY overrated at times. What a few sentences between friends! I can't wait to read more.
Woot! (And just do what I would do...post 10.)
Oh, no, Jayel. This isn't the VERY, VERY beginning. The very beginning needs a sharp object. Which I'm now applying. Going pretty well, I think!
Dee -- Thanks. One of my chapter mates suggested 30 Sentence Thursday. But that's probably going a little TOO far overboard, ya think?
The lyrical quality of his inner thoughts are mesmerizing. I love how the allegory (or is it alliteration? I never remember, lol) of his feelings for her is so poignant. I'm not one for first person, cause it is usually in the heroine's pov, so this one took me by surprise. I'd love to see more. Liking that it is through his eyes.
Great excerpt from a male's perspective. Is he going to get her?
Christa: Thanks!Surprising to me that so many of you are surprised about the male POV! But glad you seem to be liking it.
I'm an equal oppty scribbler, tho. Steph gets her own POV, too.
Hi, Jessica. Well, it is a romance novel, even if it does take some twists and turns. Does he get her today? Nuh-uh.
My favorite part = "...and I’m ready to leap up, naked, wounded, unarmed but belligerent, screaming for satisfaction. War, sex."
Love that. (Trying to hit up some of the six sunday posts...didn't get to play along today *boo*)
Welcome, Eleri! Play next week!
Terri, Won't say much but you do know I like this story and also know my other objections. They are a hot couple and there are so many moments of brilliance in the storytelling
LOVE first person present tense, especially when it's done as well as this. Keep it! Keep it!
This is awesome!
PG and Rebecca! Thanks for stopping by. Appreciate it! Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday, Rebecca. Awesome snippets, all.
Thanks for stopping by, JL.
Great snippet! What happens next?
Oh. My. Goodness. HAWT!
Thanks for checking in, peeps.
This is good! I am now following your blog so I'll know when you post new material! :) Once again, great story.
It's really fun to read some of what you mentioned last Sat. with such wistfulness. I think it's good to return to a first love- it's a reunion story now, well, for you. Great, expressive stuff!
Thanks, Clare! I LOVE this book. I'm so happy you stopped by. Hope to see you in November!
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