Sunday, March 6, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 3/6/2011

I am in the middle of a couple of projects right now and couldn't decide what the heck to pick for Six Sentence Sunday this week. And, all of a sudden, I had a craving to pull my first completed full-length ms -- Lilacs at Dawn, a Regency like Healing Hearts -- out of its hiding place and take another look. I can't believe I wrote a 429-page book. Ever. Eventually, I may go back to tinker. This is a small scene (not this small, but not much longer) in the hero's POV wedged between wedding planning and wedding mayhem.


 The night before he was to be wed, a bullet slammed into his chest and he crumpled to foreign soil, knowing he had failed.

"Forgive me, England," he murmured as his eyes closed.

He thought of the girl, fresh as lilacs at dawn, who would stand alone in the church the next morning, waiting for a bridegroom who would not come. His hand closed over a satin garter trimmed with lace and blue velvet ribbon.

"Forgive me, my darling."

Blackness claimed him.


                                            

48 comments:

sassyspeaks said...

oh la - melodrama- what fun

Katrina W said...

Oh yes so dramatic !!! I bet he doesnt die !!! hmmmm very intriguing !! hmmmm maybe he will awake to someone beautiful ??

Kerrianne Coombes said...

Oh my gosh! Heartbreaking! LOVE IT!

Jessica Subject said...

That's so sad! :( I hope you share more of this story with us! :)

heatherthurmeier said...

I like this snippet, Taryn. I think you may need to give it some attention so we get to read more from it!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Oh, so sad, and with a beautiful title, too. I agree, would love to hear more of this seemingly sad story.

graylinfox said...

Oh wow, heartbreaking.

Sandra Sookoo said...

So sad yet so intriguing.

Marsha A. Moore said...

Gripping emotions surrounded by lovely language.

Patricia Preston said...

I loved it! Great hook, kiddo!

Ella Drake said...

Oh, no!
Great set up. Definitely makes me want to read more.

Marie Dees said...

Oh, that's the type of scene that always pulled me into a romance. The injured hero falls!

Gem Sivad said...

Definitely worth revisiting. I really liked this.

gem

Sarah Grimm said...

Wow. Fantastic six, Taryn!

~Sarah
My Blog

Keri Ford said...

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww *sniff* that's so good.

Stacey Kennedy said...

Raw emotion!! Two big thumbs up!!

Ann Mayburn said...

Oh God, that's so wonderfully sad! You must dust it off and breathe new life into it.

Cate Masters said...

Wow, very intense. Hope you get back to this story.

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Wow, so dramatic. I bet he'll live to the end though, right?

Lindsay K. said...

Awww! I hope he makes it.

Hailey Edwards said...

Oh, no. *lip tremble* That's heartbreaking.

Lisa Fox said...

Whoa! Failed his country and his woman. That's pretty terrible.

Casi said...

A regency and he already has her garter? Isn't he a naughty boy, and since only the good die young I'm sure he's not actually dead.

Great Six!

Taryn Kincaid said...

What can I say? My boys are fast workers!

Rebecca Royce said...

You just made me cry

Mina Carter said...

Oh my! No, he can't die! Great hook!

Lauri J Owen said...

Very sad! :-(

Celeste said...

It's so dramatic. Which is what it's supposed to be, duh. I saw your 6 sentence Sunday posts on your blog, I really thought it was all your idea. Spawners really are a brilliant group. Lilacs are my favorite flower. I even have one blooming this year in so cal. 6SS is a great concept. maybe I'll join in.

Taryn Kincaid said...

No, not my idea, Celeste! Brainchild of the incomparable Sara Brookes. Started out a year ago with Sara and 3 other participants. Now 80...or more!

You should play!

Susanna Fraser said...

Ooh, good snippet!

Laurie A. Green said...

Very poignant, moving and tragic. I definitely think you should dust this one off.

diannehartsock said...

Sad! He can't really be dead...

JL Walters said...

Really intriguing sentences. Do look this over again for real.

Jessica K said...

Oh, yes, make sure to look this over again! And thanks for commenting on my blog today!

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Lindsay said...

This scene, vignette, is so powerful. It makes me want to read the before and after. And please tell me he did make it to the altar.
Llilacs at Dawn will be as big a hit as Healing Hearts

Linda Morris, Romance writer said...

I like this! I love the contrast between the event he anticipates (wedding) and what actually happens (gunshot). Very nice!

Edie Ramer said...

I love that! I hope you publish it. Put me on the list of people to contact when you do.

I like your writing a lot. I'm going to check out your Carina book!

laynap said...

Noooo! Damn...I hate it when that happens. You've sucked me in. Need more!

Christine said...

Heartrending six!

Laura Kaye said...

So powerful! So intense! Get back to this project! We need more!

Jayel Kaye said...

Very powerful. Loved it

Miranda Buchanan said...

So sad! Very nice post. :)

Alanna Coca said...

Nooooo!! Run Forrest!

lexcade said...

*whimper* that's sad. i want to know what happened previously and after. thumbs up!

Pippa Jay said...

Wow, have we lost him before we've even got to know him?!

J.C. Martin said...

Oh no...not before his wedding! How tragic...great 6!

jenniferprobst said...

I see the future...a manuscript pulled from the drawer and back into the light! Fantastic entry!

Lynne Murray said...

Wow, powerful scene--and a strong hook!

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