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Six Sentence Sunday 6/19/11
More from Surfer Dude, who's been kept up nights by a mysterious intruder to his realm. His only clue to the coral thief's identity is the neon pink dive fin she left behind. Now, on the night of his brother Cloud Boy's Sky Palace ball, Pierce ventures to Spa Bay for relief of a blinding headache. But the usual nymph-nurse is off at the ball, replaced by her step-sister, Mia -- who seems more than unusually ruffled by the Lord of the Deep's sudden appearance in the clinic.
Pierce rounded the corner of the reception desk to see the flustered woman on her knees, her legs tucked under her, gathering up her discs and research materials with amazing speed. For every piece she clutched to her lab-coated breast, she dropped two more. He squatted to help her.
“You can’t be here!” she yelped, as she yanked a stack of print-outs from his hand, shoved them beneath her butt and sat down on top of them.
“I am, though,” Pierce said.
What was she trying to hide?
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39 comments:
You nail the pace with every sentence, I really like how you write. Thank you very much.
Great tension. I really want to know what she's hiding, too.
Can't wait to discover what she's hiding!
She's seems very flustered and tense. I'll have to come back and learn what she's sitting on. Great six!
Oh, what IS she trying to hide? Inquiring minds want to know!
I want to know what she's hiding, too. Is she the owner of the pink dive fin? Very intriguing excerpt. :)
Love how she sits on what she doesn't want him to see. Great six!
Curious indeed. What is that girl hiding? Now I need you to tell us next week!
I can really see her sliding that stuff under her ass. Great imagery, I'm loving this story.
Curiouser and curiouser! Great SSS.
The intro description alone meant I had to come back, but now I need to know what she's hiding!
~Xakara
A Way To A Dragon's Heart 6ss
Curious about what she's hiding, but can't wait till she has to stand up - LOL!
Hmmm wonder what she's up to? Hope you'll post again from this wip next week. I'm dying to know what happens next. ;)
Great pic by the way. Oh, I believe it goes deeper than whatever she is keeping from him.
What, indeed? Keep going!
Hides it with her bum: hee! Gorgeous pic too, yum.
Hmm, that pic was yum! I'm curious to know what she's trying to hide, and why he shouldn't be here. :)
Great writing and use of active verbs. Nice!
Surfer Dude is hot!
Don't you just hate it when that happens? I did it earlier with a pile of washing, for every sock I picked up I would drop another!
I loved the drama - what is she hiding??
Chantal
I totally love Surfer Dude. Also, dudes in suits RULE.
More of both, please :D
Good question. I'm loving these teasers!
hmm, she's hiding something but also crazed that he's there. Want to read more!
I'm pretty sure she's hiding her love for Surfer Dude. Oh, and something under her butt. (Wonderful pacing and characters!)
lolol. LOVE that she sits on the papers.
What was she trying to hide? Her embarassment. Love the six.
Oh! Very very interesting!!!
Very very interesting! Liking this story!
Intriguing six! What's under her butt?? Would have been by sooner but the cable keeps going off.
Hmm. She's definitely worried about something. I wonder what she's up to? And where "here" is?
Her reaction to him sent up red flags! Definitely up to something. When are you going to tell us what? Provacative six.
Story is moving. Do remember this scene. What is she hiding?
I'm intrigued by what she's hiding and by the characters themselves. Great six!
Ooh, very intriguing! What is she hiding indeed! Great six.
Love it and the photo! Can't wait to see what she doesn't want him to see.
Ooh, what indeed? Do tell...
Love the way you describe her flustered attempt to hide the print outs.
I love these characters, and look forward to each six sentence snippet to see what they've been up to hehe Just love how cleverly you've put across her fluster and his smooth calmness. He can come help me out anytime LOL Love this six, Taryn, as always!
This is such a great story! I can't wait to read it in its entirety. Cracks me up that she sits on the papers! :)
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