Okay, Cole, you're good to go. We get you. We get what you're doing behind the bar at Flight Risk. Even why you've got that motorcycle stashed in the alley out back instead of the Escalade. You're up, Lara.
"What do you mean, 'I'm up?' Do I look like someone who's ever held a baseball bat in her hands?"
Hmm. There's an idea.
"Yeah, a bad one."
Okay, then, what's your reason for being, kiddo?
"You know about my sister."
I need to get you into Flight Risk. I need to get you there on a certain night, at a certain time. I need to set up your meet. I need a good reason for Cole to take you to the safe house. I don't think your sister will do it. Too early to drag her into it. If we even keep her at all.
"Wait. You're gonna vanish my sister?"
Dunno. What do you think?
"Let me talk to Cole."
Your wish is my command, princess.
"What's up, baby?"
"Are you hearing this?"
"What do you want me to do, whip out my Glock?"
"You're supposed to be a bartender right now, G-man."
"Right. So what'll it be, Ace? And what are you doing here?"
"Here?"
"In Flight Risk."
"I got a tip."
"What kind of tip?"
"Yeah. Sure. Right. As if."
"You're gonna have to tell me, baby. One way or another. I can't protect you if you don't."
"I guess I could tell you. But then I'd have to--"
(to be continued)
28 comments:
Terri, Looks like you're making notes to yourself on what needs to come next in your story.
Hi Terri!
I sent an e-mail out on the HVRWA loop. Did you get it? I was on digest while I was away then took myself off and now I can't find it. I met Angela James at RWA national. If you didn't get my e-mail let me know.
Terri,
This reads like I'm coming into the middle of a confusing conversation but the passage has drawn me into something. Intrigue comes to mind.
JL -- That IS, what I'm doing. Sort of. I'm making the characters tell me what they want/need to do.
Wendy: Tweeted about the person who knows me in REAL LIFE who couldn't remember my REAL name due to RWA#10 awesomeness. Angela James remembered the incident with an LOL! So looks like you made an impression. Did you pitch anything?
Lindsay: Hey, thanks for stopping by. Hope you had a great time with the Mysteries and Margaritas ladies who made it to Orlando.
Just so you know, this is an exercise I do with my characters. Author voice in italics; characters' voices in quotes. It's not an excerpt. So you haven't really arrived in the middle of anything! Actually, it's more like a re-start!
BTW, this is from the story that finaled in the M&M contest.
Now that I know I'll go back and reread the excerpt. But still definitely intriguing.
See my blog at Nights of Passion Tuesday about National.
Hi Taryn!
(Sorry about the Terri earlier. I'm still acclimating to the switch.) How embarassing that she remembered. I always try to play up my pals when I have the opportunity....even if I can't remember their real names!!! No, I didn't pitch anything. I'm focused on the medical romance for now and about to start another round of revisions. Still no rejection so I'm going to give it another shot.
Where is it? The only thing I see when I look for you is http://trscapa.blogspot.com/
Wendy: Well, she LOL'd it, so she must have thought it was amusing. Don't worry about the Terri/Taryn thing. I assure you you can't possibly be more confused than me.
Sorry. That "where is it" was directed at Lindsay!
(See what I mean about confusing?)
You're not the only one who gets confused. I figure you can call me anything, except late for dinner.
Anyway, here's the link- http://nightsofpassion.wordpress.com/
I'll be posting my blog Monday night, oh, that's tomorrow night isn't it, after 11pm east coast time.
I'm definitely going to check it out! But I see it's wordpress not blogspot, so it won't automatically pop up on my dashboard. If you don't see me, give me a shout!
SHOUT.
No problem.
I have to bookmark the different blogs I follow.
I don't know how to bookmark. HELP!
Wendy -- Just click on the little heart thingie on your tool bar. And then click on "add to favorites."
Taryn
Email me off loop.
As promised here is the link to my Nights of Passion blog.
http://nightsofpassion.wordpress.com/
I'll pop by!
Hi Terri!
Okay. Re: saving a file in favorites. I click on the heart and the site goes there. Then how do I access it?
Thanks!
HI Taryn,
Do the conversations help move you forward? Great technique, I am stuck on a scene and the workshop with Donald Maas gave some great tips of stopping and talking to your characters to see where they are in the moment.
Will try tonight if I can squeeze the time and let you know how it went.
Great googly moogly. When the site goes there, you double-click on it.
That'll be 50 cents, please.
Jen -- Yeah. I've only started doing this (basically because I was looking for amusing things to stick on the blog -- I'm such a kill six flying creatures with one boomerang lazy slug)but it really does give me a better feel for what the characters would say and do. What they want to say and do. How their voices sound. Decided I couldn't start with Lara on the run, after all. Had to go back and show the beginning.
Just checking in! Interesting method you have of working stuff out with your characters, Taryn - I'll have to try it!
I smell a pant-ser : )
Now I know that Terri shall never visit WoM again, and only Taryn, I can learn and adapt. I'm sorry to "lose" a blogpal, but happy to gain another!
I love Jo Beverley's "Flying into the Mist" take on that. Love Jo Beverley. Love mists. Flying into them....jury's still out on that.
But here's her great blog post on the subject, from a talk she gave years ago at RWA.
http://www.jobev.com/fim.html
I figured out Favorites!!! Thanks for your help! I owe you 50 cents.
You bet. I'll bill you.
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