Sunday, June 12, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 6/12/11

Back to Surfer Dude this week.

Our story up to now:  An intruder disturbs the beds of sleeping purple coral in his realm and Surfer Dude's only clue is a neon pink dive fin, size 5 1/2 M, stamped with the name "Dr. A. F. Wright" that the thief left beind when she fled. Now, on the night of his brother Cloud Boy's big ball, a raging headache sends Surfer Dude to the Sky Palace Spa Bay, seeking relief from the nymph-nurse. 

Where he meets Mia. 

“Name," the woman said, without looking up from her computer screens and the research materials spread before her across the Sky Palace Spa Bay reception desk.

"Pierce Cronoson.”

That got her attention. Ruling the oceans and rivers of New Mycenae definitely had its perks and bennies, Pierce thought.

"Oh!" The woman started, her gaze zeroing in on him like an omega ray just before a flurry of clumsy activity sent half her print-outs and discs sailing to the floor.




45 comments:

Jenna McCormick said...

Love the way you wrote this. She wouldn't have given him the time of day until she knew who he was, so true to life. Name recognition really is everything!

wearegoingonawitchhunt said...

I like the name Pierce. I want to know what happens after she gets the fluster under control :)

Jessica Subject said...

Love the woman's reaction! Can't wait to read more.

Liz said...

Love this story!

Graylin Fox said...

Heh. Could easily see the "flurry of clumsy activity!"

Stacey Kennedy said...

Pierce Cronoson--LOVE this name--so strong and SEXY! Great snippet, as always! :)

Patricia Preston said...

You rock!! Great descriptions. I have give up on Blogger letting me use my account to post.

Cate Masters said...

Poor Mia! Hope she deflates his ego a bit, lol. Loved this snippet!

Liia Ann White said...

Hehe that's a great reaction.
And he has quite a surname

Laura Kaye said...

Love how she pays him no attention til she hears his name, that tells you a lot about who he is...

Sandra Sookoo said...

LOL love the spin on Pierce's name. Awesome!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Always enjoy your six sunday snippets, Taryn... always so descriptive and enticing! Surfer Dude needs to be in my eReader so I can read the whole story :)

Lisa Fox said...

I'm with everyone else. He has a great name! And that is a fun snippet.

Taryn Kincaid said...

His name's supposed to be sort of an updated reflection of the trident. Since he's a futuristic version of Poseidon.

Cara Bristol said...

Very creative. Nice six.

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Great six!

ursulawhistler.com said...

Nice job.

sue said...

he sure got the woman flustered...

Jessica K said...

The disadvantage to fame and power is that everyone makes a mess when they find out who you are... Nicely done.

Cassandra Carr said...

LOL - I like it. Ruling DOES have its benefits...

Zee Monodee said...

Amazing name for your hero! And lol at how she jumped to attention when he mentions who he is. :)

Pippa Jay said...

Lol, love how that got her attention!

Vivien Jackson said...

Perks and bennies indeed! So happy to get to read more of this.

Sarah Grimm said...

I really enjoy this one whenever you post from it! Great six!

laynap said...

Love the names and this story. Would love to see more from Surfer Dude. :)

JL Walters said...

I remember this scene very well. Good luck with the re-working.

Sonya Clark said...

I love his last name and the hint of Greek mythology there.

Dee Carney said...

Ha! Great six!

Verna Clay said...

Poor gal now has to pick up all those print-outs and discs. Love the play on words. Made me think of Pierce Brosnan...gorgeous man.

therese gilardi said...

i love surfer dudes. and that picture is great!

Heather Thurmeier said...

Huh, she gets flustered easily! I wonder how she'll recover and try to have a conversation. Great snippet. This story is very interesting!

diannehartsock said...

Ah, ha! So that's Surfer Dude's name. I think I'd get flustered around him, too. :)

Lorien Velez said...

Awesome name! Love her reaction. That photo held my attention as well. ;)

lexcade said...

LOL Apparently Surfer Dude's a big deal. That photo is fricking awesome. Love it.

Tara Stearns said...

Hi Taryn - Interesting six as usual.

Hailey Edwards said...

Now that is an interesting last name. Sounds like she was thinking the same thing.

nouttica <-Fitting captcha for this post. :)

murdersandmysteries said...

Good, we're back to Surfer Dude. But I'm not sure if I like this or the historical better. Toss up. Guess I'll just have to buy both.
Love her reaction when he introduces himself.

Betty said...

You have to know more. Good job

J.A. Beard said...

'Membership' in the elite has its privileges. :)

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Bit arrogant, ain't he? Wonder if that'll come back to bite him in the ass. I am intrigued!

Alix said...

I love a half naked man and the ocean. Can't wait for more. Thank-you.

Lucy Felthouse said...

Heh. This is great! :)

gayleramage said...

Ha, that will teach her!

Lauri J Owen said...

Very cute - and how truly portrayed.

Charlotte Gatto said...

I hate it when people do that! Just bark an order without looking up, smiling or saying please. Glad he got her attention!

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