Sunday, November 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 11-20-11

An idea for Cloud Boy's story (he's Surfer Dude's baby brother) has arrived like Athena bursting forth from Zeus's brow. So in honor of that plot bunny, here's six from the story of their big brother Aidon, The Reaper, and hero of my heart.  (One day, Aidon, I will find you a worthy home.)    

            “Listen, you big lug,” I murmur, gasping for air when his lips release mine.  “You’ve brought me Below, turned my whole world upside down – and  I haven’t done anything to you.”

            My world isn’t exactly spinning normally on its axis, Stef.”

            "But I --" The Big Guy's stunning admission shakes me to the core. "Really?"






44 comments:

Anonymous said...

LOVED it. I already enjoy your characters in this snippet and I barely met them! Excellent excerpt!

Alix said...

Great six! Well done.

Brien Michaels said...

I want more! I'm always up for anything set in the underworld (assuming that's what the Below is). I can't wait to read more.

Jessica E. Subject said...

I love how their personalities come out in the dialogue! Great six! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Shades of Hades and Persephone? Loved the voice and the interaction between the two :)

Heather Thurmeier said...

Sounds like you have a great series building. Can't wait to read them all!

Lacey Wolfe said...

Love the name calling. Makes it very realistic. :) Great six, looking forward to next weeks.

Sandra Renee Pesso said...

I like the sudden realization. Sounds like an awesome tale! Sensational six, Taryn!

Stacey said...

Perfect six! I love her surprise. :)

Lisa Fox said...

I love their interaction! I can't wait to read more about them!

Nina Pierce said...

Oh, love that admission and that it's shaken her. Nice job!

Layna Pimentel said...

Love the dialogue between them. Great job!

Gem Sivad said...

Nice when the guy admits he's vulnerable. Great six!

Graylin Fox said...

Tee Hee.. Rock his world girl! Or in this case, make waves.

Cara Bristol said...

The dialog feels so natural. Good job.

Jayel Kaye said...

I like this so much. And the characters are great. Keep at it

Liz said...

um, I'll take him! fabulous six

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

Oh, I love his revealing. If she doesn't want him, I'll take him.

Unknown said...

Love her reaction. So curious about who they are and where they are. Want more!

Unknown said...

Sweet six. :)

Laura Kaye said...

Ooh, definitely intrigued!

sue said...

Plot bunny - cute - and sometimes they multiply like bunnies too :D

Sandra Sookoo said...

Intriguing!

Unknown said...

Compelling. Makes me want to know more. Is he up for grabs? Count me in.

Sondrae Bennett said...

Aww. That was really cute. I love how she's stunned. :)

S.Lira said...

Lovely six and David Gandy! YUMMM

Anonymous said...

You know that I think this is a good story but the present tense still bothers me. Janet

Misa Buckley said...

This snippet makes me wish it was sixTEEN sentence Sunday! I want more!

Anonymous said...

hmmm, maybe she doesn't know him as well as she thought, what else doesn't she know?? Very nice six!!

Cara Michaels said...

Nice interaction between these two. Great 6, Taryn. :)

Gemma Parkes said...

I like the relationship that's building here!

Lex Valentine said...

Oh yeah. I love this. Love HIM!

Anonymous said...

LOL! Love the double take!

Unknown said...

Uh oh...love confessions! :-)

JoAnn Ross said...

Oh, I LOVE guys who'll admit that they're affected by what's happening, too! Great six!

Anonymous said...

Wait....what? LOL, great six!

Vivien Jackson said...

Oh yes, really! I loved this interchange, could feel the sparks flying. Sweet, romantic, intense, gorgeous. Hope I get to read more.

diannehartsock said...

Loved her reaction! Perfect. I really enjoy your characters.

Cherie Marks said...

Oh, my goodness! Great characterization. Her reaction is so visual. Nice six.

Gayle Ramage said...

lol at her reaction! :D

Jessica Knauss said...

Perfect scene! Wonderful dialogue and plot movement.

Vivien Dean said...

Very enticing! Well done. :)

E. Jamie said...

Ha! Loved it. (laughs)

D Carney said...

LOL! I *love* her response!

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