The five-word sentence might have been the longest conversation she’d had with the hunk behind the bar to date. So far he hadn’t said more to her than “Good choice, baby.”
The notion that he might be unbending loosened Lara up faster than the tequila shot another bartender had poured before Sex-on-Legs started his shift. On the other hand . . . whoa. Was the gorgeous blonde presence of Billie perched on the barstool beside her tonight responsible for Tall, Dark and Hot's sudden chattiness?
Lara shook off the surge of ugly emotion and reminded herself that she and Hunkalicious had not exchanged more than ten words tops, that Billie was her best friend, and that jealousy’s green head should not be popping up like a demented whack-a-mole.
Lara shook off the surge of ugly emotion and reminded herself that she and Hunkalicious had not exchanged more than ten words tops, that Billie was her best friend, and that jealousy’s green head should not be popping up like a demented whack-a-mole.
46 comments:
My oh my girl! Where the heck is the rest to this post???? Love that last line - well actually every line. Great job!
I love this - no surprise cos its yours - I love the insightful emotions. MORE!
LOL I love the whack-a-mole line. I've used the reference before, but not in this context. Your use is fresh and very funny. Great job.
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Allure
That sucks - nothing worse than watching a friend steal your eye candy. :(
Great internal dialogue! I think you described jealousy perfectly. :)
Lol - great last line!
Loved your six! Especially the Whack a Mole! You know I love anything funny.
I'm in, all in for the whole book. Where is it? :)
Love it! Can't help but sympathize Lara. Great job! :)
Maybe not popping up, but oh such a vivid description of where I've been. :) Great six!
I love getting a taste of what Lara is thinking and feeling. Last line is a keeper for sure!
Love this character's voice. Sex-on-legs made me laugh out loud. Fun snippet!
I can hear her teeth grinding together and absolutly love the demented whack-a-mole line!
LOL! Lara is hysterical. I always love snippets from this story.
That last line is awesome! Love it!
Incredible voice in this piece! Wonderful!
Hehe, nice piece, Taryn. Love the humour :)
Now this is a great six!
I want to see a demented whack-a-mole now
Great voice. Excellent six!
GREAT six!!
Love the voice! Her wit is hilarious. Great six!
He might be quiet but I bet he runs deep. Well done.
I just love reading your stuff. "Hunkalicious" my fav!
lol, nice six!
hunk-a-licious and sex-on-legs - you sure know how to characterize! best, therese
I like her voice--so much personality there!
That's tough when you want to be happy, but then that green monster rears its ugly head...
I wanna meet Hunkalicious!! :)
lol funny!
Wonderful scene, great humorous voice!
Oh-but whack-a-mole is soooo fun!
As always love your six.
Fantastic six! I LOVE the whack-a-mole line!
Interesting description. Nice six!
Love the Voice! Great six. :o)
Sometimes jealousy can be a good thing... Hope it works to her benefit!
LMAO I love the Whack-a-Mole reference (my fave game). Here's hoping that Lara bags Hunkalicious Sex-on-Legs (best references EVER) Cole soon!
LOL Lara is a blast, love the wit and sarcasm in this... FAB six, Taryn
LOLOL!!! Great voice! love it!!
Loved it. Thanks for sharing.
Good lines. Just what are you working on or are you multi-writing.
Multi-writing. Sorta concentrating on this one. Don't like to put too much of it up here, though, so I switch off with some of the others.
Last line is priceless!
Cole and Lara - Yay! Demented whack-a-mole is hilarious. Love the tone of this story.
LOL I can't pick just one thing I loved about this excerpt. The sympathy/humor/pacing, were all spot on.
I love that last line.
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