Sunday, May 15, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 5/15/11

Back to Cole & Lara today:

           The five-word sentence might have been the longest conversation she’d had with the hunk behind the bar to date. So far he hadn’t said more to her than “Good choice, baby.”
           The notion that he might be unbending loosened Lara up faster than the tequila shot another bartender had poured before Sex-on-Legs started his shift. On the other hand . . . whoa.  Was the gorgeous blonde presence of Billie perched on the barstool beside her tonight responsible for Tall, Dark and Hot's sudden chattiness?
          Lara shook off the surge of ugly emotion and reminded herself that she and Hunkalicious had not exchanged more than ten words tops, that Billie was her best friend, and that jealousy’s green head should not be popping up like a demented whack-a-mole.




46 comments:

laynap said...

My oh my girl! Where the heck is the rest to this post???? Love that last line - well actually every line. Great job!

Kerrianne Coombes said...

I love this - no surprise cos its yours - I love the insightful emotions. MORE!

AllureVanSanz said...

LOL I love the whack-a-mole line. I've used the reference before, but not in this context. Your use is fresh and very funny. Great job.

Best,
Allure

Pippa Jay said...

That sucks - nothing worse than watching a friend steal your eye candy. :(

Jessica Subject said...

Great internal dialogue! I think you described jealousy perfectly. :)

Liz said...

Lol - great last line!

Patricia Preston said...

Loved your six! Especially the Whack a Mole! You know I love anything funny.

Graylin Fox said...

I'm in, all in for the whole book. Where is it? :)

Lorien Velez said...

Love it! Can't help but sympathize Lara. Great job! :)

Gem Sivad said...

Maybe not popping up, but oh such a vivid description of where I've been. :) Great six!

Heather Thurmeier said...

I love getting a taste of what Lara is thinking and feeling. Last line is a keeper for sure!

Cate Masters said...

Love this character's voice. Sex-on-legs made me laugh out loud. Fun snippet!

Jennifer L Hart said...

I can hear her teeth grinding together and absolutly love the demented whack-a-mole line!

Lisa Fox said...

LOL! Lara is hysterical. I always love snippets from this story.

Lisa said...

That last line is awesome! Love it!

Laura Kaye said...

Incredible voice in this piece! Wonderful!

Lucy Felthouse said...

Hehe, nice piece, Taryn. Love the humour :)

Liia Ann White said...

Now this is a great six!
I want to see a demented whack-a-mole now

Luxie Ryder said...

Great voice. Excellent six!

Carolyn Rosewood said...

GREAT six!!

Jean Davis said...

Love the voice! Her wit is hilarious. Great six!

Rebecca Royce said...

He might be quiet but I bet he runs deep. Well done.

Jayel Kaye said...

I just love reading your stuff. "Hunkalicious" my fav!

Kim Knox said...

lol, nice six!

therese gilardi said...

hunk-a-licious and sex-on-legs - you sure know how to characterize! best, therese

Susanna Fraser said...

I like her voice--so much personality there!

Dee Carney said...

That's tough when you want to be happy, but then that green monster rears its ugly head...

Zee Monodee said...

I wanna meet Hunkalicious!! :)

Sandra Sookoo said...

lol funny!

Jessica K said...

Wonderful scene, great humorous voice!

kayspringsteen said...

Oh-but whack-a-mole is soooo fun!

Lindsay said...

As always love your six.

Kim said...

Fantastic six! I LOVE the whack-a-mole line!

Felicia said...

Interesting description. Nice six!

Liana Brooks said...

Love the Voice! Great six. :o)

diannehartsock said...

Sometimes jealousy can be a good thing... Hope it works to her benefit!

lexcade said...

LMAO I love the Whack-a-Mole reference (my fave game). Here's hoping that Lara bags Hunkalicious Sex-on-Legs (best references EVER) Cole soon!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

LOL Lara is a blast, love the wit and sarcasm in this... FAB six, Taryn

Meg said...

LOLOL!!! Great voice! love it!!

Ginger Simpson said...

Loved it. Thanks for sharing.

JL Walters said...

Good lines. Just what are you working on or are you multi-writing.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Multi-writing. Sorta concentrating on this one. Don't like to put too much of it up here, though, so I switch off with some of the others.

Roberta Walker said...

Last line is priceless!

Eleri Stone said...

Cole and Lara - Yay! Demented whack-a-mole is hilarious. Love the tone of this story.

Hailey Edwards said...

LOL I can't pick just one thing I loved about this excerpt. The sympathy/humor/pacing, were all spot on.

J.A. Beard said...

I love that last line.

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