The dawn sky met the Thames, fragile April light and river the same ghostly gray as the mare emerging from the gloom. Needles of torment spiked through Webb’s right leg as he watched the mare approach.
“Bloody hell.” He cursed the idiot who rode her and shifted his weight in the saddle. “Take heed, boy. Or you’ll have us both in the river.”
(Very unlikely that snippet will end up being the "meet" or the first six sentences, but it is what it is...for now.)
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36 comments:
A great Six. I love the description of the of the sky being compared to the colour of the mare - very nice.
Nice descripitions, provides a great visual.
I like how well you've captured the essence of the time and historical setting just in those six sentences. Great SSS.
Well done! An opening scene I can picture in my head.
An excellent introduction!
You really set the stage well. I could see it in my head.
I like that snippet. I hope it doesn't change too much. You do really well creating a sense of atmosphere in only a few sentences.
You've set the setting and the tone so very well.
It's good beginning. Love the description.
Nice lyrical writing.
It is what it is.. and it's pretty dang wonderful :-)
I hope it remains the opening scene. Very evocative of time, place, and mood. What's not to love? Great six.
That first sentence is just plain gorgeous.
Very atmospheric. A great opening!
The description is simply beautiful!
Nice description, and I love the title.
Excellent description - good six
Beautiful description! I want to know what happens next. Great six!
Lovely visual; you put me right there. And there's strength and clarity in his words. Nice!
Love the descriptions, Taryn. Beautifully written. I hope this stays as the beginning, too.
I cast my vote for this being the beginning, too -- unless you have something even better up your sleeve!
I love it, as always. Is it weird that I started to imagine a hot guy in the river all angry and dripping and...did I mention hot? LOL
Anyway, back on track-awesome Six.
Best,
Allure
Vivid imagery. It really sets the mood/tone.
Nice scene. Great atmosphere coming through on this.
How well I remember this story. Glad you're working on it again.
Very evocative!
Love how you brought the gloom in.
I like this! And thanks for stopping by and reading mine, as well! :)
Keep going!
Intriguing first six. I'm definitely hooked. Looking forward to seeing more from this wip.
Great description.
excellent description. I espeically loved needles of torment
Wow, brilliant six Taryn! :)
Very atmospheric! I felt immersed!
Really like the "fragile April light". Still want to know how the wedding reception turns out. Next week?
Very nice. I'm feeling some chemistry already!
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