Sunday, May 22, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 5/22/11

           You've seen Webb get shot, and some of the wedding scene. Here are the first six from my Regency WIP, Lilacs at Dawn: 

           The dawn sky met the Thames, fragile April light and river the same ghostly gray as the mare emerging from the gloom. Needles of torment spiked through Webb’s right leg as he watched the mare approach.

         “Bloody hell.” He cursed the idiot who rode her and shifted his weight in the saddle. “Take heed, boy. Or you’ll have us both in the river.”



(Very unlikely that snippet will end up being the "meet" or the first six sentences, but it is what it is...for now.)
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36 comments:

Kerrianne Coombes said...

A great Six. I love the description of the of the sky being compared to the colour of the mare - very nice.

Tara Stearns said...

Nice descripitions, provides a great visual.

Gem Sivad said...

I like how well you've captured the essence of the time and historical setting just in those six sentences. Great SSS.

Sarah Grimm said...

Well done! An opening scene I can picture in my head.

Jessica Subject said...

An excellent introduction!

Jenna McCormick said...

You really set the stage well. I could see it in my head.

Heather Thurmeier said...

I like that snippet. I hope it doesn't change too much. You do really well creating a sense of atmosphere in only a few sentences.

Liz said...

You've set the setting and the tone so very well.

Patricia Preston said...

It's good beginning. Love the description.

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice lyrical writing.

Liia Ann White said...

It is what it is.. and it's pretty dang wonderful :-)

Jenna Jaxon said...

I hope it remains the opening scene. Very evocative of time, place, and mood. What's not to love? Great six.

Vivien Jackson said...

That first sentence is just plain gorgeous.

Lisa Fox said...

Very atmospheric. A great opening!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

The description is simply beautiful!

Linda Morris, Romance writer said...

Nice description, and I love the title.

sassyspeaks said...

Excellent description - good six

Kim said...

Beautiful description! I want to know what happens next. Great six!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Lovely visual; you put me right there. And there's strength and clarity in his words. Nice!

lexcade said...

Love the descriptions, Taryn. Beautifully written. I hope this stays as the beginning, too.

Jessica K said...

I cast my vote for this being the beginning, too -- unless you have something even better up your sleeve!

AllureVanSanz said...

I love it, as always. Is it weird that I started to imagine a hot guy in the river all angry and dripping and...did I mention hot? LOL

Anyway, back on track-awesome Six.

Best,
Allure

Hailey Edwards said...

Vivid imagery. It really sets the mood/tone.

Marie Dees said...

Nice scene. Great atmosphere coming through on this.

JL Walters said...

How well I remember this story. Glad you're working on it again.

Susanna Fraser said...

Very evocative!

Lindsay said...

Love how you brought the gloom in.

Camryn Rhys said...

I like this! And thanks for stopping by and reading mine, as well! :)

Dee Carney said...

Keep going!

laynap said...

Intriguing first six. I'm definitely hooked. Looking forward to seeing more from this wip.

J.A. Beard said...

Great description.

Jayel Kaye said...

excellent description. I espeically loved needles of torment

Lucy Felthouse said...

Wow, brilliant six Taryn! :)

Laura Kaye said...

Very atmospheric! I felt immersed!

Eleri Stone said...

Really like the "fragile April light". Still want to know how the wedding reception turns out. Next week?

Alanna Coca said...

Very nice. I'm feeling some chemistry already!

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