Sunday, May 8, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 5/8/11

Happy Mother's Day, everyone.

Couldn't recall any motherly sort of passages that didn't involve Epilogues and such, so instead, I offer you a toast.

More from my Regency WIP, Lilacs at Dawn.  Our story up to now: The night before his wedding, Viscount Webb is shot while on a mission on foreign soil and loses consciousness clutching his bride-to-be's garter. Somehow, he makes it back to England in time.  But his new bride, Sabrina, and his brother, Andrew, think he's drunk, rather than wounded, in shock and lightheaded from loss of blood.

At the reception, he offers his new bride a toast:

Webb rose, taking her hand.  All eyes turned toward them as he swayed on his feet, lifting his glass to her. 

"To my wife . . . the woman I would not die for."

An awkward silence greeted his words, followed by shocked gasps that made Sabrina's face flame.

"You mean 'would die for,' you ox," Andrew said.

"I know what I mean," Webb growled, his voice so low she had to strain to hear him, his hand tightening on hers so she could not turn away.  "I crawled back from hell to be here."

                                             



54 comments:

Pippa Jay said...

Oh, I hope she realizes what he's had to do to be there for her!

Liia Ann White said...

That's a bit of a blunder! lol

Jessica Subject said...

Wow, that was an awkward moment for everyone, but very sweet. I hope everything works out for them.

Great six!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

lol! Great passage - I wonder why he was to marry another woman and now this one? Fascinating!

Jenna McCormick said...

The last line brought it all together!

Gayle said...

Oh, now this sounds intriguing! Great six!

Patricia Preston said...

Great snippet! Love the hero's reaction.

Gem Sivad said...

He wouldn't die for her-- he lived/lives for her. Great way to show it!

Liz said...

Very telling - love it!

Rebecca Royce said...

He made it back for her. Holy cow. That was fabulous writing.

Sandra Sookoo said...

oh wow, talk about dropping a bomb. Great six!

Stacey Kennedy said...

LOL! Taryn...I LOVED every part of your snippet! Can't wait to read this!! ;-)

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Dang! This is great! More please!

jenniferprobst said...

Gotta love Webb! So good.

BG Lashbrooks said...

Wow. I'd love to see what her response to that is!

Vivien Jackson said...

That was a *very* romantic toast. Am liking this character a lot.

laynap said...

Damn! I hope he recovers quickly so she can clobber him!

Kary said...

Love the six. Misunderstandings are so fun to read...and write. Great job.

Hailey Edwards said...

Lovely sentiment. Maybe he could work on his delivery before his wife strangles him? LOL Great six.

sassyspeaks said...

oh goody - more please

Sarah Grimm said...

Great six! I can't wait to learn her response.

Eleri Stone said...

When are they going to realize he's injured? And why hasn't he told them? Can't wait for them to find out.

Vegetarian Cannibal said...

"I wouldn't die for..." Very uh...romantic of him, lol! Well done!

Kim Knox said...

oh wow, love it. Great six.

Zee Monodee said...

Oh dear - that's a gasp moment indeed! Love how you play with both very differing perceptions to the situation. :)

Kerrianne Coombes said...

Oh very good .. I love your characters..

Jessica K said...

I just knew he'd been through hell and back. What a great scene and lovable characters!!

graylinfox said...

Great six. I love drama at weddings.

Taryn Kincaid said...

I do soooooo enjoy everyone's comments!

Just to clear up a little confusion, tho -- Sabrina is Webb's first and only wife. This scene is toward the latter fourth of the book. The "misunderstanding" about whether Webb's drunk or gunshot doesn't last past their wedding night, of course. Webb's a war hero and has been blackmailed into doing some spying on the side. He doesn't want Sabrina or anyone else to know about his clandestine activities, which is why he hasn't bragged about being shot while on his secret mission in France. Enough people knew Webb was shot rather than drunk -- including Webb's father and Sabrina's brother -- for the wedding to take place as scheduled.

JL Walters said...

Good to see you working on this again. Webb is truly wonderful.

Linda Morris, Romance writer said...

Oooh, "the woman I would not die for." What a grabber. I like it!

writeintention said...

Great play on words from the cliche expected. Loved every word. Great job!!

Lynn Caldwell said...

Loved it. I already picture Webb and the scene, just from these sentences, and I already want to read more.

Liana Brooks said...

In perspective, it's a beautiful sentiment. From everyone else's POV it's quite shocking. Good work.

I'm looking forward to seeing the finished novel. :o)

Devin said...

Now THAT is some epic stubbornness.

diannehartsock said...

She's not going to be a widow, is she? Not after everything he's been through to get there. (whatever that was!)

Lindsay said...

ROFL.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Great, dramatic scene. I love his final statement.

Cate Masters said...

Excellent teaser. I hope he has enough stamina left for the wedding night! :)

Lynne Murray said...

Glad he made it through the wedding and all will be revealed on the wedding night. A very appealing hero, with many facets! Great suspenseful six!

lexcade said...

Kinda teared up at that one...and I'm stodgy when it comes to romantic sentiments. Sabrina better appreciate Webb, dammit!

Jean Davis said...

Auww. Quite ouching, even if she doesn't understand what he means just yet. Great six!

Verna Clay said...

"To my wife . . . the woman I would not die for." That is absolutely one of the best lines I have ever read because of the way it relates to this story. Congratulations.

Roseanne Dowell said...

great six

Laura Kaye said...

So much happens in these 6--fantastic. Love the misunderstanding and how much is truly revealed in his toast!

J.A. Beard said...

A nice come-back on his part! Great way of showing how determined he is.

Saranna DeWylde said...

This packs quite a punch. Wonderful!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Oh, I'm loving this! Great six, Taryn!

Kathleen Grieve said...

WOW! Very powerful Six! So much of what Webb is
feeling here!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

So happy you're working on this one... hope you finish and get it out because I'd love to read it. Love this six...quite an awkward moment turned romantic. Fabulous.

Charlotte Gatto said...

What a great excerpt and very clever. I can just see her face!

Suzie Quint said...

Lovely sentiment. Nicely done.

Roberta Walker said...

I love how nobody else knows what's really going on!

Jayel Kaye said...

Great word play, Taryn and the tension it caused is wonderful

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