A little hectic and rushed this weekend, but I thought I'd take a break from Surfer Dude's story to go back to Lara & Cole for a bit:
They drove to her apartment without bothering to ask her address and both agents stood watch—Tolliver at the door, firearm drawn, and Cole in the messy, clothes-strewn bedroom—as Lara headed straight for her laptop.
“I’ll take that,” he said, grabbing the neoprene computer case from her hand.
“The hell you will,”she said, tugging the strap.
“Do you want to wrestle me for it, Ace?”
“Got a warrant, G-man?”
“I can have one in ten seconds, so get your stuff so we can get the fuck out of here -- and mention the word 'warrant' to me one more time, and I'll take you to school."
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38 comments:
Great six Taryn, pacy dialogue, am a bit sad I didn't get any Surfer dude this week ;)
Snap! I almost want to see him take her to school lol. Great dialogue!
Hope you had a good time in NY! Snappy dialogue but I didn't get what he meant by he would take her to school.
Well, he's a little testy! There's a really rough ride or really great sex in their future. Or those are the same thing! *grin*
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Love the power struggle play between these two! Their strong, independent spirits come through in this Six. Well Done!
Take him to school? lol, never heard that used as a threat before! Great stuff.
I want more! Love that last threat. LOL
Oh baby, I'm guessing lessons with this guy could be very interesting. Woot! Great six.
Great dialogue, can almost feel the crackle in the air between them!
Woohoo.. Class is in! I want a front row seat.
Hope you had a wicked time in NY! No doubt you did :)
Fantastic snippet, Taryn, as always. I do love your work... and G-man, love it!
Fantastic dialogue!
"Take you to school" - fantastic dialogue
Omg that was great! Loved that last line. The tension between these two is fantastic!
Love the snappy dialogue, Taryn!
Wish I could have gone to RWA this year. Maybe next? Would love to meet you. :-)
ok I'm with everyone else on this one. School?
Yay, Lara and Cole! Finish this story, Taryn!!! I want the whole thing.
Great back-and-forth between them! LOL
Okay, so some of you need to brush up on your urban slang / sports slang / rap music lingo. Take her to school = show her what's what/teach her a lesson/open a class session/offer a private tutorial/bust her, um, balls.
Eleri: Have been re-inspired, more or less, after RWA.
LizF: So sorry you weren't there. You missed the high octane CarinaPress cocktail. (It was blue!)
Alix (and anyone else missing Surfer Dude): Maybe next time.
Great banter in this snippet. :)
Someone's letting the pressure get to him!
This story produces the most fantastic 6. I know we talked about this at RWA and I am totally obsessed with it.
Wow, who needs bullets with that snappy talk?!
Snap! Take that!
loved the dialogue. Nice six!
Great interaction between Lara and Cole. :)
Take her to school? I bet she can teach some lessons of her own! Loving the chemestry/electricity between them.
Love the hostility between them. Wonder who could do the best teaching at school.
Thanks for the explanation - for an awful moment I thought he was her Dad! Nice angry tension :) glad he's not her 'Daddy' - although now that is raising other connotations!!
btw - I couldn't get your link to work from Six Sunday, I had to link from one of your posts elsewhere.
Oh there's some great sexual tension (and sex) in their future! Love his threat; such a big, sexy jerk.
Dialogue great. Had to read the first sentence three times. Check it over. Glad conference was fun.
Love this! Kick ass six, Taryn!
You write awesome dialogue! What a battle of wills you've created...love it!
I live in the sticks. Me and Tommy Ray don't never hear no urban slang. But it sounds pretty polite. We'd just say Hey we're gonna teach yo' ass a lesson you ain't never gonna forget. ROTFLMAO.
Great dialog! Love the sassy replies!
I like Agent Bossypants.
Clearly, if "take you to school" has so many people confused, it's not working and it's gone. Doesn't really fit Cole's character, anyway. Too many words for him! Tried mashing a few sentences together to fit into the six sentence format and that was the result. First sentence also, as well as dialogue tags that originally were action beats and will be again.
Trying to come between a girl and her laptop - uh oh!
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