Saturday, July 2, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 7-3-11

Happy 4th of July Weekend! So great to see some of you at RWA!


Happy Independence Day             

A little hectic and rushed this weekend, but I thought I'd take a break from Surfer Dude's story to go back to Lara & Cole for a bit:

     They drove to her apartment without bothering to ask her address and both agents stood watch—Tolliver at the door, firearm drawn, and Cole in the messy, clothes-strewn bedroom—as Lara headed straight for her laptop.

     “I’ll take that,” he said, grabbing the neoprene computer case from her hand. 

     “The hell you will,”she said, tugging the strap.

     “Do you want to wrestle me for it, Ace?”

     “Got a warrant, G-man?”

     “I can have one in ten seconds, so get your stuff so we can get the fuck out of here -- and mention the word 'warrant' to me one more time, and I'll take you to school."
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38 comments:

Alix said...

Great six Taryn, pacy dialogue, am a bit sad I didn't get any Surfer dude this week ;)

lexcade said...

Snap! I almost want to see him take her to school lol. Great dialogue!

Patricia Preston said...

Hope you had a good time in NY! Snappy dialogue but I didn't get what he meant by he would take her to school.

Xakara said...

Well, he's a little testy! There's a really rough ride or really great sex in their future. Or those are the same thing! *grin*

~Xakara
Dawn's Early Light 6SS

Kathleen Grieve said...

Love the power struggle play between these two! Their strong, independent spirits come through in this Six. Well Done!

gayleramage said...

Take him to school? lol, never heard that used as a threat before! Great stuff.

Jessica Subject said...

I want more! Love that last threat. LOL

Gem Sivad said...

Oh baby, I'm guessing lessons with this guy could be very interesting. Woot! Great six.

Cate Masters said...

Great dialogue, can almost feel the crackle in the air between them!

Graylin Fox said...

Woohoo.. Class is in! I want a front row seat.

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Hope you had a wicked time in NY! No doubt you did :)
Fantastic snippet, Taryn, as always. I do love your work... and G-man, love it!

Liz said...

Fantastic dialogue!

Marie Dees said...

"Take you to school" - fantastic dialogue

laynap said...

Omg that was great! Loved that last line. The tension between these two is fantastic!

Liz Fichera said...

Love the snappy dialogue, Taryn!

Wish I could have gone to RWA this year. Maybe next? Would love to meet you. :-)

sue said...

ok I'm with everyone else on this one. School?

Eleri Stone said...

Yay, Lara and Cole! Finish this story, Taryn!!! I want the whole thing.

Dee Carney said...

Great back-and-forth between them! LOL

Taryn Kincaid said...

Okay, so some of you need to brush up on your urban slang / sports slang / rap music lingo. Take her to school = show her what's what/teach her a lesson/open a class session/offer a private tutorial/bust her, um, balls.

Eleri: Have been re-inspired, more or less, after RWA.

LizF: So sorry you weren't there. You missed the high octane CarinaPress cocktail. (It was blue!)

Alix (and anyone else missing Surfer Dude): Maybe next time.

Hailey Edwards said...

Great banter in this snippet. :)

Jessica K said...

Someone's letting the pressure get to him!

Rebecca Royce said...

This story produces the most fantastic 6. I know we talked about this at RWA and I am totally obsessed with it.

Pippa Jay said...

Wow, who needs bullets with that snappy talk?!

Alisha Robinson said...

Snap! Take that!

Sandra Sookoo said...

loved the dialogue. Nice six!

Lorien Velez said...

Great interaction between Lara and Cole. :)

diannehartsock said...

Take her to school? I bet she can teach some lessons of her own! Loving the chemestry/electricity between them.

murdersandmysteries said...

Love the hostility between them. Wonder who could do the best teaching at school.

wearegoingonawitchhunt said...

Thanks for the explanation - for an awful moment I thought he was her Dad! Nice angry tension :) glad he's not her 'Daddy' - although now that is raising other connotations!!

btw - I couldn't get your link to work from Six Sunday, I had to link from one of your posts elsewhere.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Oh there's some great sexual tension (and sex) in their future! Love his threat; such a big, sexy jerk.

JL Walters said...

Dialogue great. Had to read the first sentence three times. Check it over. Glad conference was fun.

Nichelle Gregory said...

Love this! Kick ass six, Taryn!

Verna Clay said...

You write awesome dialogue! What a battle of wills you've created...love it!

Patricia Preston said...

I live in the sticks. Me and Tommy Ray don't never hear no urban slang. But it sounds pretty polite. We'd just say Hey we're gonna teach yo' ass a lesson you ain't never gonna forget. ROTFLMAO.

Michele Barrow-Belisle said...

Great dialog! Love the sassy replies!

Sonya Clark said...

I like Agent Bossypants.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Clearly, if "take you to school" has so many people confused, it's not working and it's gone. Doesn't really fit Cole's character, anyway. Too many words for him! Tried mashing a few sentences together to fit into the six sentence format and that was the result. First sentence also, as well as dialogue tags that originally were action beats and will be again.

Ranae Rose said...

Trying to come between a girl and her laptop - uh oh!

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