Saturday, August 13, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 8/14/11

     Mia forced back the heat rising to her cheeks by adopting an air of cool professionalism as she stood up and reclaimed the stool behind the reception desk -- indicating with a flick of her hand that Surfer Dude's place was on the other side of it.

      He rose to his full height and nearly took her breath away.

      Leaping lobsters.

      Well over six feet of prime, masculine real estate.

      When he glanced down at her, her toes curled within the chunky fleece-lined boots she’d taken from Letisha’s locker.

      She adjusted her eyeglasses with scholarly deliberation and then picked up a digitex plasma clipboard as if it were a shield.

      "What seems to be the problem?" she asked.


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48 comments:

Alix said...

'..prime, masculine real estate.' I love it! Fantastic six. Thank you.

kerriannecoombes said...

A great six. I love how your writing draws me in, and when i get to the end i am always dissapointed that there is no more to read. ...'He rose to full height and took her breath away.' A fab line

Karysa Faire said...

No problem at all, that I can see. Great lines. My fav is the leaping lobsters.

Gem Sivad said...

Humor, visual presentation and character development--all in six. Great snippet!

Jessica Subject said...

I love how you show her struggle and determination to maintain her composure. Great six!

Cate Masters said...

Love using her clipboard as a shield. Wonderful snippet. Left me wanting more.

Paula Martin said...

WOW! Not surprised her toes curled. More please!

lexcade said...

Oh man... He sounds fantabulously toe-curling. Great six!

Heather Thurmeier said...

Great six. I love this story!

Marie Dees said...

Oh, I'm all for Surfer Dude!

Sandra Sookoo said...

lol "leaping lobsters" Loved the snippet!

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

LOL! Very funny six! Love the 'leaping lobsters'. Thanks for sharing.

sue said...

I like how she tries to demonstrate her professionalism - yeah right - hard to do with toes curling lol

Lisa Fox said...

Leaping lobsters indeed!

Eleri Stone said...

Leaping lobsters...lol! Love how your sense of humor comes through in this story.

laynap said...

LOL Love the humor. :)

Daisy Harris said...

Love! Beside loving futuristic, I love oceany themes. Great job with an intriguing six. Addind to my TBR pile now!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Thanks, Daisy. But I haven't actually finished it yet! LOL!

Bree said...

Oh, yum! Sexy six!

Suzie Quint said...

Love the real estate comment.

J.A. Beard said...

That's a LOT of attraction. She's going to need a bigger clipboard. :)

Piper said...

I'm totally into your six. Great work! I love the description of him as well.

Jessica K said...

What's the problem? No problem! Another humorous and accurate six.

Dee Carney said...

LOL! Cute! Way to play it cool. ;)

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Terrific characterization, world building, and humor. You always make me laugh.

Sondra said...

This was LOL funny. I'm looking forward to many more problems for those two.

murdersandmysteries said...

'six feet of prime, masculine real estate'
'digitex plasma clipboard as if it were a shield'
I can't figure out which one of these if my favorite here. Ah, to heck with it. Love'em both

Hailey Edwards said...

Perfect touch of humor in this piece. I don't think her clipboard will save her from his hotness, though. ;)

Jenna said...

Leaping lobsters is right if he's anything like the pic! Great humor in this six!

Lex Valentine said...

Yep I agree with the others, prime real estate is a classic line!

Cara Bristol said...

Very well done. This was a joy to read. My favorite Six so far.

Aimee Laine said...

"Surfer Dude". :) Ha! Cute!

Adriana said...

yummy! That professional mask is in grave danger of slipping off...

Anonymous said...

tory moves ahead. The first sentence was a bit much but do like the rest and the direction of the story.

Rawiya said...

Great six and thx for the visit to Taboo

xakara said...

I love the humor beneath her reaction! Lovely!

~Xakara
A Way To A Dragon's Heart 6SS

Joanne Stewart said...

Great six. Yeah, my favorite line is the leaping lobsters as well. love it.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Terrific scene with lots of sizzle between them. I loved "leaping lobster" -- clever and original. Good job.

lizculver said...

Very visual six - I love her reaction to him.

Alanna Coca said...

Love this. I can picture the whole scene in these few sentences. Great job

Laura Kaye said...

Great voice! Enjoyed!

E. P. Beaumont said...

What one thinks, and what one does, are two different things... and there's an interesting power struggle here, both interior and exterior.

Stacey said...

I loved these six! What book are they from?

Vivien Dean said...

Great introduction to him, loved her reaction!

Kathleen Grieve said...

This story always makes me smile! I'm glad you posted your Six from it! :)

Lucy Felthouse said...

Love the humour - great six! :)

Jayel Kaye said...

leaping lobsters-prime, masculine real estate. what great language

Brien Michaels said...

That leaping lobsters part made me laugh. I love your six!

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